POEM ABOUT IRELAND
The sun shined through the beautiful landscape of ireland,
the trees showing off their bright GReen ,one of ireland's brand.
THe mountains looking at their Reflection
on the spectacular lake mirror,
making sure that This day will have no Error.
"it was a perfect day to have a swim "said the fish.
she swam and swam and swam until she reached the end.
Hi my names Nevvynn and I think this is such a beautiful photo and such a beautiful poem
ReplyDeleteHi there, I really enjoyed this. But maybe change some of the stuff, on Ireland's there are no capitals. On nouns such as peoples names and countries. It's just the grammar you need to fix but apart from that it's great!
ReplyDeleteHi David, I enjoyed this piece of work about Ireland but I think you need to check your grammar,otherwise it is great!
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ReplyDeleteHi David, I really liked your poem it gave my a good picture in my head. Maybe you could look at Ireland and change the little i in to capital I. But its still a great poem
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ReplyDeleteI liked how you described ireland and added pictures to go with your story. I loved your pictures. I think you should look at the start of the word green but apart from that it sounds amazing.
From Pela, St bernadette’s school 2016
Hi David I really like your poem and how well it rhymes. Maybe next time make sure you proofread more carefully.
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