My Version of three little pigs as the last pig to be visited
I heard some loud footsteps coming up the street,I could hear their knocking too and then I heard a big loud scream echoing down the street.I looked out my window my brother pig was covered in his collapsed straw house,well obviously my smart but not so smart dear brother was all gobbled up but that big, mean, horrible wolf.
The house in between,My brother wasn't the wisest of us, he made his home of sticks.The wolf blew down his sticks, and ate him up.He was gone, both my brothers were gone.
I locked everything, I seen him happily walking down the street,why is he at my home is he not full yet.The wolf came and I knew it was him, he yelled at my door thinking it'll magically open he then started to knock louder and louder.No one would answer so he climbed up to my window,wolf tried to break it,wolf isn't so strong . I opened the window started a conversation, he said "why can I not come in"I replied"umm because you don't live here and I am not allowed to Know you" "and who says that" "nah come in…" *calls 111* "what do you want?" "...what was that" ...the police Bust in ,they take wolf out as they did wolf tried to blow my house down.This was in the papers,I was in the photo in the paper luckily I posed for the camera.I ran inside,only because I was hungry and I wanted my t.v .I don't like t.v but it was the only thing i could do while the wifi was off.
That was really good and I like how you used the noun and the verb. I want to see more of your story and your writing.good job
ReplyDeleteKia ora regina my name is Anihera i really like your version of the three little pigs. I realised your writing has really wise word’s .How long did it take???.
ReplyDeleteKia ora regina my name is noah and I've come to say that it's a good piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteOn thing I think you could improve on is putting a full stop and comma in the right place.
In a way it reminds me of the original story with the first two pigs house being blown down.
I have a question, why did you only include the last pig?
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ReplyDeleteHey Regina, that was really good and I liked how you used nouns and the verbs in the Three Little Pigs. I want to see more of your stories and your writing, good job!
ReplyDeleteHey Regina, that was really good and I liked how you used nouns and the verbs in the Three Little Pigs. I want to see more of your stories and your writing, good job!
ReplyDeleteKia ora Regina my names Brad. I like your version of the three little pigs. I noticed that your writing doesn't have much punctuation, maybe next time you can add more.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Regina my names Brad. I like your version of the three little pigs. I noticed that your writing doesn't have much punctuation, maybe next time you can add more.
ReplyDeleteHi Regina, my name is Rosrine, I am from St Pius X Catholic School in Auckland. I really liked this version of the 3 little pigs. Something I noticed in your piece of writing is that you don't a lot of punctuation. Maybe next time you could add more. Besides that, this was a good piece of writing, keep it up!
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