My way of the Three Little Pigs
Hi my name is christian and this is my little story of the Three Little Pigs and I of course what people call me the Big bad wolf.
It started when i was wondering around sadly alone thinking who should i hang out with, my lunch or my dinner, why should i care i'm gonna eat them all anyway.
Suddenly I felt this type of feeling that that's so deep inside me i just nah i'm just hungry but sad at the same time i wanted a friend a friend that's kind,sweet not that salty oh man i'm just so deadly hungry. After i ate I just realized i'm really bad at making friends. So i went walking walking walking trying to find a friend, suddenly i saw a house that's made out of straws.
So i thought of myself "who would stupidly build a house out of straws" So i kindly said hello but their was no one there I said hello again no one was answering, I quietly went in I was looking around but i saw a bright pink tale under a chair and i realise it was a pig, i heard him say " hey what are you doing here can't you see im eating here" before i said something i felt a little bit of a sneeze coming so i huff and i snuff and hache ewww i sneezed and guess what the whole house completely fell besides i already new it was gonna fall it's made out of straws.
So I ran as fast as I can pass this ugly looking house and wait,i put 13 steps back and i looked at this other house but this time it was made out of brown pointy sticks so i thought of myself again and i said "what in the world am i living in!" I mean seriously who are these creatures.I gently i mean real gently Knocked on the door "ouch I just pricked myself! Far Out who's ever in their.
I opened the door and said hello i listened carefully, no one answered I said hello again no one answered man this is weird i went inside i looked around and guess What,i saw another pig i said hello but he didn't answer, i mean is he deaf or something come on pig say something here, so i said for myself loudly " yep hes
Deaf. When i was about to leave I felt another sneeze coming up so i huffed and i puffed and i hache ewwww. Guess what this house didn't fall down it blew down haha you get it cause i hache ewww ha so i ran and ran and ran and i bumped into this other house and i said "finally a smart and normal looking house made out of red bricks. I knocked normally and said "hello who's there" someone replied angrily "hey go away before I smash you in the face you hear me." Oh man jeez calm down little piggy gosh but the pig came right at my face and bamp i sneezed again aha shame pig.
After that the house didn't fall but, I did I fell right into jail! What why, oh and i just realised haha, I'm allergic to pigs, No wonder i always sneeze haha.
And that my friend is my believable true story of the three little pigs.
THE END
Kia ora Christian I really enjoyed your remake of the three little pigs it is really hilarious and is totally better than the normal three little pigs. I find this story really fascinating.
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Hi Christian,I really enjoyed your way of the three little pigs. I think it was better than the real version.Your story really entertained me.
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Hi Christian my name is Aliyah. I really enjoyed your story the Three Little Pigs it was so interesting and I loved the way you wrote the story.
ReplyDeleteHi Christian my name is Jordon and I like your story about the three little pigs and the big bad wolf and I like all the persuasive words you have put in your writing.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Patience. I really like your story about the Three Little Piggies. And I really like the ending, I think it is very cool and sad.
ReplyDeleteHey Christian My name is Reuben.Your remake of the Three little pigs and the big bad wolf was very interesting.Next time make sure the "I" are capital
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Hey Christian My name is Reuben.Your remake of the Three little pigs and the big bad wolf was very interesting.Next time make sure the "I" are capital
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Thank you so much guys for these great awesome comments i really appreciate it but my name is Tyrepa buy the way and yeah haha
ReplyDeleteI might write some more stories in the future cause im not that good at writing or reading but i really injoyed writing the story it's my favourite too and it just took me 1 and 2 hours to finish my writing thank you.
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ReplyDeletei really liked your story of the three little pigs it was very good
i think you could improve your story by puting more in about the Charters.
if your were the little pig and the big bad wolf blew your house down what would you feel like??
Well I would probebly feel angry and sad because I worked really hard on building my house and yeah
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ReplyDeleteTyrepa I really like how you express the bad wolf feelings, I think it was a fantastic story.
but can you check back on your story and make the I into a capital letter.
Hi my name is Simon I really think that you have actually succeeded in this writing progress. I really think you should reread your work because you had some small letters instead of capitals. You should carry on displaying your writing work and keep up the good effort.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Simon I really think that you have actually succeeded in this writing progress. I really think you should reread your work because you had some small letters instead of capitals. You should carry on displaying your writing work and keep up the good effort.
ReplyDeletehello Tyrepa
ReplyDeleteI saw a complex sentence. Could you please put a comma or a full stop.
Hello Tyrepa,
ReplyDeleteYour story is exciting and interesting. My favourite part was when he realized that he was allergic to pigs.
Something to look at next time is spelling and capital letters. e.g. Your characters names need capitals and your I's.
Alex From Room 8
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ReplyDeleteHi there,my name is Nathan and I am a student in room 8 at St.Bernadette School.I really like the way that you put paragraphs and I really like the you put Problem and the Outcome.
ReplyDeleteAnd Next time please Reread your work because you had small letters not Capital letters and in your first paragraphs your name is not in capital.
Hi, my name is Liam and I am from Blaketown school, I really enjoyed this story, But maybe you need to read back over that and put capitals on some nouns that need some, also change some > i's in capital I's. It's mainly the grammar but a part from that, this is a great story!
ReplyDeletehi my name is liam e
ReplyDeletethis story is so funny you could put commas and e.g. i realy liked the bit when he fell into jail and he relisted that he was allergic and he sneezed but you could put some off the things that i said to put in. you need to work on your capital i's
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ReplyDeleteHi my name is Jess I thought your story was great and very creative. This is a cool idea, to write the big bad wolfs side of view. Maybe you could read back and check your grammar. Apart from that it was great
ReplyDeleteHi, My name is Caitlin. I thought your story was great and very creative. This is a cool idea, to write the big bad wolfs side of view. Maybe you could read back and check your Punctuation . Apart from that it was great.
ReplyDeleteWow Tyrepa,
ReplyDeleteI liked your story,it has lots of detail in it and one thing I think you could work on is your punctuation.
I really liked your story good work.
HEY stbernadettesroom6
ReplyDeletewhat a fab post I really enjoy you story
From Mackenzie
Hi my name is Henrietta Latu I go to Saint Pius X Catholic School. I really thought that your story was very interesting and long to read. This has a lot of details that makes your story become more fun to read. Next time you could go back and re-read checking your punctuation.
ReplyDeletekeep up the great hard work!!
Hi my name is Maddie, how did you write that much it's heaps anyway keep up the great work
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Hi my name is Maddie, how did you write that much it's heaps anyway keep up the great work
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ReplyDeleteKia ora
ReplyDeleteI'm Jyvhen
Your work is really great but when you wrote it did you make sure that it made sense because I saw a few mistakes but that is ok everyone makes mistakes even the teachers make mistakes even the best speller in the world make mistakes and I liked how you put a long ewwww in that bit made me laugh for a very long time and it is amazing how you put a lot of information even I can't put that much information in my story's and this really amazing like I said before. My class are working on speeches and three or two people are going to rotary and if you turn this into a speech this would be a good speech
Bye
From Jyvhen
Kia ora
ReplyDeleteI'm Jyvhen
Your work is really great but when you wrote it did you make sure that it made sense because I saw a few mistakes but that is ok everyone makes mistakes even the teachers make mistakes even the best speller in the world make mistakes and I liked how you put a long ewwww in that bit made me laugh for a very long time and it is amazing how you put a lot of information even I can't put that much information in my story's and this really amazing like I said before. My class are working on speeches and three or two people are going to rotary and if you turn this into a speech this would be a good speech
Bye
From Jyvhen
Kia ora
ReplyDeleteI'm Jyvhen
Your work is really great but when you wrote it did you make sure that it made sense because I saw a few mistakes but that is ok everyone makes mistakes even the teachers make mistakes even the best speller in the world make mistakes and I liked how you put a long ewwww in that bit made me laugh for a very long time and it is amazing how you put a lot of information even I can't put that much information in my story's and this really amazing like I said before. My class are working on speeches and three or two people are going to rotary and if you turn this into a speech this would be a good speech
Bye
From Jyvhen
Hi Tyrepa,
ReplyDeleteI really like your twist on the story: The 3 little pigs. Because it is very humorous and detailed. I thought that the last pig was very funny.
By Destiny (WIS)
Hi Tyrepa,
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you've changed the story of the three little pigs keep it up. How long did it take you write the whole thing?
It took me and the whole class like 2-3 days, thank for reading it thoe.
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DeleteGood job! I think that this is a very good reimagining of the three little pigs story. I especially like the joke at the end. Did some other people in your class also write stories like this or were you the only one? However, I think there were a few grammar mistakes. Good luck.
ReplyDeleteHello room 6
ReplyDeletethis is a great story it is very long your way of the three little pigs is so good how long did it take you to make this wonderful story?
read some of the comments and you'll see your answer... thanks for the comment thoe.
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